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Monday, 9 November 2015

Doom beach

I found myself sinking into the wet sand, I was just about to run into the lapping waves. Three two, one, and in seconds I was covered in salt water from head to toe. I scrambled out of the icey cold water. In seconds I got ready to go in again in. I was in there again drinking the salt water although not on purpose of course.  I had had enough so I decided to walk along the crisp sand and let the waves do their lapping on their own without me.


  1. I really like your first sentence Samantha. You have started right in the action which puts me there in the moment.. well done! Maybe next time you could make your font a little smaller as it makes it difficult to read when I have to keep scrolling down the page. Miss D :)

  2. I love your writing it is very descriptive it gave me goose bumps next time I think you should make your writing a bit smaller.

  3. You story is really cool!
    You have used really good describing words.
    You made me want to go to the beach too!